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12 years ago
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http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/159/a/8/shizaya_by_stormchained-d52t40n.pnghttp://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2013/034/c/c/halibel_under_the_stars_by_stormchained-d5tqxjo.jpg 156f3i

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wonder if anyone around here could gimme few tips or pointers =] thanks! >_<


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Not bad, but I think you should do something about the hair to give it depth, probably some shine, for example, the sideburns in the second pic. You don't leave the bodies flat in tone, so the hair should follow the same style to me. Sort of conflicting otherwise. You did it well on the top of the head though.


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12 years ago
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Hope you don't mind me asking, but...is Halibel supposed to look pregnant?
Also, I think that her legs (from hips to knees) need to be longer too. The proportions seems a little off.
I somewhat don't agree with the hard white (?) back lighting either. Make it more subtle. She looks like she's sitting in a bush of some sort so light shouldn't be bouncing that much and that hard near the ground, especially since its a night setting. Other than those, they're looking pretty good!


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your skin coloring is REALLY good...but the drawing part has something left to be desired.


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12 years ago
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I'll point out some things I've noticed.
You need to add depth!!
For both (especially the first one) it looks too chaotic -- you need to have some sort of backlighting that pushes them out of the background. But the hair and the clothes don't have a lot of value, so they look like they all have equal lighting (which is untrue, realistically). I suggest doing some value studies so you can get a feel for how shadows work to make an image "pop".

For the second one, well.. I'd recommend looking at some female anatomy references. Waists aren't that small in proportion to the rest of the body (at least, I hope not). Secondly, the stomach... is a bit confusing, especially with the lighting. Is she supposed to be pregnant, as someone else pointed out? Thirdly, her neck's too long, as are her arms. Fourthly--where are her feet?! Don't hide parts of the body you don't want to draw! They still belong there! 😉

Also keep a consistent light source! For the woman, the light falls on her face and onto her breasts at different angles.

There's also colour theory, but I find that hard to relay to others. [Look it up if you feel inclined]

For the most part though they're pretty good. Keep practicing and you'll be fantastic! 🙂

Here's some good references for you:

Fantastic value study:
http://browse.deviantart.com/art/Value-Study-2-283054635

Female anatomy:
http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs12/f/2006/329/2/3/Female_Anatomy_Patterns_by_Snigom.jpg


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pretty good. i like the first one. halibel has a stomach bump. weird.


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12 years ago
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Hm, the colors of both the pics are pretty good; emitting enough dark essence.

The first pic is perfect but there're a lot of questions to the second one.

I'm pretty much not satisfied with her lips and the chest and the abdomen look weird.

Ditto Scyfon's comment about the pregnant part.


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